T1+Writing

__ Tuesday 5th April 2011 __

**Why People should come to the Bay of Plenty.** Do you need some more friends? Well if you do come to the Bay of Plenty. There are loads of friendly people here. These are some reasons why you should come to the Bay of Plenty, there are loads of places that you can visit, there are beautiful views and the beaches.

In the Bay of Plenty there are loads of places that you can enjoy like, the Bayfair shopping centre which is where there is loads of shops and eating places counting Farmers which is a clothes store, Hannah's which is a shoe store, McDonald’s which is a food store and there are loads more awesome stores in Bayfair. Theres the Kiwi 360 which is a place where tourist can go to learn about the Kiwifruit industry. When you are in the Kiwi 360 you can go around the farm on a tour. You can walk up the stairs to see the view in the big kiwifruit and there is way more than that to do there. In Papamoa there is the Game on outside centre. Which is where you can go blo kart sailing, play laser tag and you can also do some claybird shooting. You can go to way more places in the Bay of Plenty. There are lots of beautiful views in the Bay of Plenty. You can walk up Mount Maungunui and look at the view as you walk up it, at the top there is an amazing view which everyone loves. There is also the Papamoa hills. When you get to the top there is a very beautiful view of the sea, beaches and country side. There are a lot of other views in the Bay of Plenty. In the Bay of Plenty there are lots of very safe beaches. There is surf and there are calm beaches. There are beaches by the Mount, Tauranga and Papamoa and tons more. There are lifeguards at mostly all of the main beaches in the Bay of Plenty.

You should come to the beautiful Bay of Plenty. While you are here you can come to all of the different places, see the beautiful views and go to the amazing beaches in the Bay of Plenty. There are loads more places to see. The people that live in the Bay of Plenty are always willing to help anyone. So just come to the Bay of Plenty and you will have the most fun ever!

//Where is your learning intention and success criteria? This should have been copied from the class wiki Abbey! You need to use paragraphs to separate your three main ideas. Excellent introduction and conclusion but your language isn't strong enough to persuade me in the middle of your arguments. Stronger reasons are needed, backed up with detail also. Excellent use of a rhetorical question. // //Miss Crone //