T2+Narrative+Writing

__Thursday 23rd June 2011__

L.I. We are learning to edit and proof read our writing

S.C. We have
 * made it make sense and flow nicely when reading
 * used a thesaurus
 * changed the order of the sentence to sound more interesting, e.g. starting with a action verb

Before: After: Before: After: Before: After:











__My Dialogue__ __Kobey and Lila__

“Hey grab my hand quick!” says Lila putting her hand out to grab Kobeys hand. Lila tries to grab Kobeys hand but she slipped. “I’m trying but... I got it pull me....” said Kobey. “I got you just hold on tight” says Lila pulling Kobey out. "Its lucky you have my as a sister or you could have died just then" said Lila.


 * __Monday 20th June__**


 * __WALT - identify personifications and use them in our writing__**

S.C. - we can identify the human trait being described we can identify the object being given a human trait we can write our own examples of personification we can explain why this helps to create a picture in our mind

What is being personified? **The wind.** Which human trait or quality is given? **Whispered**
 * 1.**The wind whispered through the dark and gloomy forest.

What is being personified? **Gardener** Which human trait or quality is given? **Happy flowers**
 * 2.**The gardener lovingly added the manure to his crops believing he was making happy flowers.

What is being personified? **The sun** Which human trait or quality is given? **The sun can’t** **Beat down on us** What is being personified? **Time** Which human trait or quality is given? **crawled**
 * 3.**As we walked through the scorching desert, the sun beat down on us.
 * 4.**Time crawled as Tim sat in the hot detention room painfully watching the clock tic.

What is being personified? **Chainsaw** Which human trait or quality is given? **It can’t** **sing its deadly song.**
 * 5.**The lumberjack leveled the many trees into a clearing and his chainsaw sang its deadly song.

What is being personified? **High Heels** Which human trait or quality is given? **They can’t call out to her.**
 * 6.** When Monica walked through the shoe store, each shiny pair of high heels called out to her.

What is being personified? **Freedom** Which human trait or quality is given? **They can’t rang across the fruited plains.**
 * 7.** When the patriots defeated the redcoat army, freedom rang across the fruited plains.

What is being personified? **Pencil** Which human trait or quality is given? **Can’t walk off desk.**
 * 8.**As Alice searched for her missing pencil, she said sarcastically, “Well, I guess it just walked off of my desk.” She looked at her classmates accusingly.

What is being personified? **Ugly yellow wallpaper** Which human trait or quality is given? **It can’t scream**
 * 9.**Kelly was so happy that Tom and she were moving in together, but when she walked into her new residence, she dropped her suitcase. She had never seen the inside of the house which Tom’s grandmother had given them, and though she was grateful to receive such a nice gift, the ugly yellow wallpaper in the kitchen screamed at her. She knew she would have a lot of work to do to make her new house livable.

What is being personified? **Guilt** Which human trait or quality is given? **It can’t poke and chew.**
 * 10.**William knew that he shouldn’t have eaten the last cookie out of the cookie jar. He knew that his father loved to eat chocolate chip cookies after work, but William ate the last one anyway. Now as he waited for his father to come home, guilt poked and chewed at William. As delicious as the cookie was, William now wished that he had never opened that cookie jar.

__Tuesday 14th June 2011__

__WALT- use our senses to help describe in our writing.__

S.C. We can describe what our marshmallow - Looks like - Smells like - Feels like - Tastes like __Marshmallow desription__ See: My Marshmallow is the colour of my cheeks changing colour when I mistake my brothers for a different person. It looks like a big soft cloud in the nice warm weather. It is about the size of a large marble with sprinkles of snow on top of it. Smell: It smells like pink smokers just been brought at a dairy on a hot summers day. It smells like nice strawberries just been picked from the fresh green garden. Feel: It cracks in my finger just like squeezing polystyrene ball just coming out of a huge toy box. When I squeeze it it makes me feel like I'm sitting on the clouds. Taste: It tastes like bright red jellybeans dropping into my mouth while I am walking through the water at the beach. It is as sweet pavlova with a cherry on top.

__Wednesday 8th June 2011__


 * __WALT - identify similes and metaphors.__ **

S.C. - We can identify the similes which use 'as' We can identify the similes which use 'like' We can identify metaphors We can explain what the similes and metaphors mean/are telling us about what we are reading

**__Metaphors__** Metaphors are a way to compare to by saying that one thing is another thing. For example, we say somebody is a fool. In the past in Europe, a fool was a person who entertained the king or queen by doing silly things. The fool was a kind of clown. He often did crazy or stupid things to make people laugh. So when we call somebody a fool we really mean that he or she is doing something silly or stupid. We don’t really mean that they are somebody who entertains the king or queen. We are using a metaphor.

What do we mean when we say these things:

When we say someone is a pig we really mean that //**they eat to much or that they are really messy.**// When we call someone an angel we really mean //**that they are sweet.**// If we say someone is a giant we really mean //**that they are really tall.**// When we call a man an ogre or a woman a witch we really mean **//that they are ugly.//** When somebody plays cards and we call them a shark, we really mean **//that they are tricky.//** If we say that somebody is a volcano ready to explode, we really mean that **//they are really mad/angry.//** When we say somebody is bright we mean **//that they are really brainy.//**

**__Metaphors__** Metaphors are imaginative ways to describe something by comparing that thing to something else. For example, if I wanted to say that Dan is tall, I could say that //Dan is a giant//. Use a metaphor to describe somebody who is:

Tall: Shelby is tall Kind: Georgia is very kind Fast: Kennedy is fast. Slow: They are so slow. Smart: Nicola is smart. Fat: Tom is fat. Sneaky: Bob is sneaky. Angry: Patrick is angry. Beautiful: People are beautiful. Ugly: Matt is ugly. Stubborn: Jack is stubborn. Short: Amy is short. Thin: Ella is so thin. Silly: Sam is so silly. Scared: Jane is scared. Easily: Shirley was easily scared.

__Thursday 9th June 2011__

__Walt: identify and use alliterations in our writing.__

S.C- We can identify alliteration in text. We can create examples of alliteration on different topics/consonant sounds.

Bouncing Ben bounced over the beautiful big blue butterfly. Clever cat cleaned up cabbages while talking to cabin crews. Dabbling duck daily doubles dozens of damaged goods. Fishing fred fished for frogs. Georgia and Gina gracefully played guitars while eating grapes. Hannah had horrible habits of hitting hairdressers. Jumping Jacob grabbed Jamie’s jacket.